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Instead of choosing the cartoon versions, i choose the characters on the recent movie, Tam Cam: An Untold Story, for more specific depicting the personalities of each character.

Cam - the stepsister of Tam
The Step-mother
http://soha.vn/day-la-nhan-sac-cua-tam-cam-di-ghe-qua-cac-thoi-ky-20160823094756552.htm
Tam


9 comments:

  1. Hi! I love the whole aesthetic of your Storybook. It's very clean and easy to navigate. Your Comment Wall link does not work when I clicked on it to try to comment on your page. I think that you copied the link to the page from your profile because it says that I do not have access to the page and that I would have to log out of my account. In your introduction, there are some grammar mistakes. In the first sentence next to the stepmother, you might want to revise and say "Nobody knows her name" instead of "known". Also, the last paragraph describing Cam, you can make that more fluid. I would also like to see a small paragraph describing why you chose to write this specific story-line for your storybook. I can't wait to read the rest of your story!

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  2. Hello Kha,

    Your Introduction is done very well. I like that you introduced each character, gave some of their background, and provided a picture of them. I was not quite sure what story you are using for your storybook, it would be nice to have a reference to that so I could read that story to better understand the context. You could create an author's note and provide some more information there. Also, I noticed that you made a reference to a location and I thought that it would be helpful to the reader if your added a hyperlink to that location on the wikipedia website or the link to the location on google maps; I believe that helps the reader's imagination flow as they get into your story.

    Oh! I almost forgot, I thought it was very original to see a fairy godfather, as the character is typically female. I am glad you provided information of that character, as well as links to some of the symbols, etc.

    I look forward to running into your storybook again, great job!
    Madi

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  3. Hello Kha,

    The interactive storybook was very interesting to me as I found myself more engaged to the story itself. Another great element to your story was the introductions that made me understand and follow each character more clearly. Your author's note seems to be missing, but other than that I thought everything surpassed the standards we were given. I think it is important to have stories like this that link us to the past but with the ability to connect further by bringing in present day influences. I look forward to reading more of your storybook after this story!

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  4. Hi Kha, I have never read or seen the movie about Tam and Cam so I’m very excited to read your Storybook and learn about the story. First thing is that your storybook is beautiful! All of the pictures you have chosen fit the story so well and they are breathtaking. I liked that you chose to use pictures of the characters instead of drawings because it makes it easier to see them as people. In your introduction I am glad that you chose to give a good description of each character, it helped me out a lot since I have never read the story. The flow of the bedtime story was a little hard to follow. Maybe try having the part about the father telling Tam the bedtime story before the excerpt about Rumpelstiltskin, or combine them onto one page. Also, having the dialogue written as a list with – in front of every new line is a little hard to follow.

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  5. Hey Kha, I just wanted to say that your storybook is amazing and very detail oriented. I like the use of the imagery along with the color schemes incorporated in your portfolio it really helps the images you chose standout. I read your story, The Miserable, and I really liked the plot of this story along with the characters that were used. I thought the part where Tam's father died leading up to her birthday was really sad along with the part where they made Tam do some errands on her birthday without acknowledging the fact that it was her birthday. You did a great job making the reader sympathize with Tam with the situation that she is going through. I read your Author's Note and I wanted to ask if shifting the villain role from the stepmother to Cam made it easier for you to re-write the story or did you find it more challenging?

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  6. Hey Kha! I really loved how you introduced your storybook. Taking the time to describe each character made it easier to understand why each does the things that they do. I also enjoyed noting the similarities and differences between your tale and the story of Cinderella. One thing I was wondering was how they came to treat Tam as a servant? They moved her, but other than that, there didn't seem to be an explanation for how that happened. I also enjoyed how you tied Rumpelstiltskin into the tale. Was that part of the original as well? Also, I liked that the fairy godparent was a godfather in this telling. I'm interested to see if that changes his perspective and interactions with her since mothers and fathers tend to offer different perspectives and opinions. Overall, good work! I'm excited to come back and read the rest as you continue adding to your story.

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  7. Hello Kha,

    I absolutely love your introduction. This should be the template to the introductions that are done in the class. Some of the stories that I have read I was trying to learn the characters as I was reading the stories. However, with your introduction strategy I was able to learn each character before diving into the stories. Also, you really helped paint the picture of the characters by providing pictures for each person along with a small description. Your creativity is on point! I also learned something new! When you were talking about "Ong But" and the magical stick that he carried. The stick is also known as Bạch Phất Tử. I appreciate you providing a link to look deeper into the meaning. I was a little disappointed when the descriptions were in a different language.

    I enjoyed the story "A Bedtime Story & The Jealous". There are a few little mistakes. I would suggest proof reading the passage once. When I first write a story I always have a few mistakes. You did a great job though!

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  8. Hey Kha, I really like what you have done with your Storybook Project so far! First and foremost, the overall formatting and aesthetic you have created for your project is excellent. Each page is vibrant and the images included are entertaining and or informative. I also really like how you brought Rumpelstiltskin into the story. The idea of two rival magical beings and their apprentices / protected battling adds a whole new level to the classic Cinderella story. This Storybook Project is a really cool mix of stories from a variety of different cultures. I have always found it fascinating how certain stories seem to permeate all cultures, and how these stories manifest differently in each culture and what the difference might reveal about those cultures. This storybook adds another level to that conversation in the sense of what might be learned through the synthesis of these different stories. Great job with your Project, this is an awesome Storybook!

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  9. Hi Kha, I really enjoyed reading your story The Destinies! I did note a few grammatical errors. For example, in the following sentence “They saw Tam's happy and they saw the luxurious of the house.”, I think you meant to say “happiness” instead of happy. A recommendation Laura gave me to help catch grammatic/spelling errors was to download a text-to-speech tool in the browser. This tool will read your story (or whatever is on your page) out loud, which may help catch some of the errors. I know this tool definitely helped me and I hope it can help you too. Also, I really like how your project website is set up. It is very clear and easy to use. Having a link to your comment wall on your homepage is very beneficial! Overall, I think your story was well written and easy to follow. I think you have created a great storybook!

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