The journey to Netherland
One day, Alice and her sister sat on the bank and enjoyed the comic book. Alice thought that book was very weird since it didn't contain any words in it, just plain drawing pictures. Alice imagined the scenes that the pictures left in her mind.
Suddenly, she saw a very pretty butterfly flying very close to her. Alice noticed that the butterfly was two size bigger than normal. Alice was so surprise as she saw that butterfly came closer to her and look at her wristwatch and murmured, "Uhmm, we still have a plenty of time." Alice didn't hear anything wrong, but who are "we"? "Me and the butterfly", she thought.
She knew in the world of fairy tale, animals could talk like people, but this was the first time she heard a word from a butterfly. She wondered where the butterfly come from.
Following the butterfly, there came a door. The door with nothing attached on and imposingly stood in the middle of the forest. Alice looked for the butterfly but no sign to be found.
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"She probably behind the door," said Alice.
Alice looked for the key, but only saw a perfume bottle with a tag "try me" on. Alice didn't hesitate to spray a bit a flower fragrant on her and pretty much enjoyed it. Suddenly, a pair of wings appeared from her back and the door opened.
She stepped through the door bravely and the view in front of her was completely different, not in a forest but in the garden with colorful blooming flowers. There she found a butterfly. The butterfly seemed very happy to enjoy the nectar. All the sudden the butterfly flew up to the sky. Alice's wings also started to flap and her feet was off the ground. Alice flew into the air like a bird. The butterfly flew for a long, long time.
During the fly, Alice noticed there were many things floating around her. She tried the honey bottle in a floating table and it was very good. She saw a book, and a radio also. A raven flew passing her made she remembered about her dog at home. Who would feed him as she could not be back home? And she wondered when the fly would be done?
Alice looked up at the sky. She noticed the differences. The sky was hiding behind the wide circle, just like she was inside the giant well and tried to come back to the ground. Alice was right. It turned out that she was living in a space in the bottom of the giant well. As she touched the ground, Alice didn't hesitate to discover her new world.
"Welcome to Netherland," a welcome sign in the road side stated.
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Author's Notes:
I simulated this story based on the original Wonderland: Down the Rabbit-Hole is part of the Alice in Wonderland unit from Alice's Adventures in Wonderland by Lewis Carroll (1865).
The original story told about Alice, who saw a Rabbit that was in hurry to go somewhere and she decided to follow the Rabbit. The Rabbit was in hurry as he took out the clock from his waistcoat pocket and run. With all the sudden, Alice fell onto a rabbit-hole, which pretty much like a tunnel. Along the fall, she saw a floating bookshelf, a map, and an empty bottle Orange Marmalade. Alice was pretty much enjoyed the "journey" until she threatened herself that the fall would never ended. Then she worried about her cat, if she wouldn't be back home. After a long fall, she finally touched the ground and she realized that she was in the middle of the hall. She bravely went forward and ended up being stuck in a locked room. She drank a bottle titled "Drink me" and her body shrinked into a tiny little girl. She then turned into a giant when she ate the cake named " Eat Me". Fearful of being transformed several time, Alice cried out loud.
Hi Trần,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your author's note, I liked how you decided to switch up things from the original story to yours, such as instead of having a rabbit having a butterfly instead be her guide. One downfall I did notice was the need for proofreading. However I do have a couple questions...If she had wings why not have her fly through the door and are the objects she is seeing normal sized or bigger?
Hi Trần!
ReplyDeleteI recognized your story immediately from Alice in Wonderland. I liked how you changed it up and made it more of your story. Specifically that you changed it from a rabbit to a butterfly. I also had the same questions as Crystel. I think there was a little too much unnecessary information and was lacking some important things to help the story along. I liked where it was heading I just think it needs a few tweaks.